If She Only Knew WIP Picture

PLEASE comment if you fave! I worked hard on this.
All right, I'm going to try to take part in the 100 Picture Challenge, or whatever it's called here. Basically, you draw one picture each for one of 100 themes. I just started learning how to draw human faces about two months ago. I was going to hold off on entering the challenge until I'd gotten bodily postures down better, but figured that if I waited that long I'd never get anywhere. So I know I still need a lot of work. Maybe doing this challenge will help me improve, maybe not. I like to hope that maybe someday I'll be able to redo this picture and it'll look a whole lot better. For now though, it's much better than what I could have done a couple of months ago.
This is a scene from Part 2 of Escape From Manitou Island [link] and is of my main character, Charmian. It illustrates the theme of "Vacation," as that's exactly what Charmian's planning once she gets to Manitou Island. If she only knew that some evil spirit's going to ruin it for her YET AGAIN.
This is just the inked sketch. I cropped off a bit of the background for now. I'm planning on filling it all in with colored pencil, as that's the only medium I have, that and a photo program which mangles my pictures when I resize and try to up the saturation a bit.
Anyway...the next theme I believe is "Mother Nature" and I already have it inked in.
This will be scrapped later on when I upload the finished version. Just wanted to put this in my gallery to brag a bit.
Criticism not desired as I already know all the flaws this has, thank you very much.

I know I saw something in Lake Michigan. So what was it? Her brow furrowed. Could something from there make its way through to here...?

"I don't even know if it has anything to do with the Island," she murmured, chewing on her lip. "Maybe this place has its own manitous and stuff...in fact that's kind of what they told me...I just don't know how to communicate with them..." Her face slowly lit up, and she went to her window and peered out. From here, Lake Michigan and Little Traverse Bay were barely visible, in the distance, and she stared at the dark roiling water for a few moments.

"Like the story said," she thought aloud. "A manitou used to live there. Maybe that's what I saw? Maybe it's trying to talk to me now!" She took a step back and started glancing around her room. "I bet that's it! Maybe I can finally learn how to talk to them! They're showing themselves, so--they WANT me to see them!"

If that's so...then how come it disappeared...?

This thought made her frown again, and she puzzled over it a moment before shaking her head. "Because there were others around," she said matter-of-factly, and nodded. "Others who've never even HEARD of Manitou Island before." Her good humor returned, and she got to her knees and started fishing around under her bed for her old backpack. She dug it out, feeling around inside to make sure nothing was left over from the last time; then she started poking around her room, depositing everything she thought she might need into the pack. She started smiling as she loaded it more and more.

"Snickers bars for Pakwa," she said, making a mental checklist. "Costume jewelry for Ocryx, just in case I need a favor. This for Peepaukawiss, in case I meet him again. This book for White Deer...and this for Stick-In-The-Dirt...and this for Manabozho..."

Peepaukawiss and Manabozho are from Ojibwa mythology. Ocryx is © Mackinac Island's Haunted Theater. Charmian, Pakwa, White Deer, and Stick-In-The-Dirt are © Tehuti.
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