Meeting Megissogwun WIP Picture

PLEASE comment if you fave! I worked hard on this.
Introducing...the drawing that almost killed the 100 Picture Challenge!
All right, I'm going to try to take part in the 100 Picture Challenge, or whatever it's called here. Basically, you draw one picture each for one of 100 themes. I just started learning how to draw human faces about two months ago. I was going to hold off on entering the challenge until I'd gotten bodily postures down better, but figured that if I waited that long I'd never get anywhere. So I know I still need a lot of work. Maybe doing this challenge will help me improve, maybe not. I like to hope that maybe someday I'll be able to redo this picture and it'll look a whole lot better. For now though, it's much better than what I could have done a couple of months ago.
This illustrates a scene from Part 17 of Escape From Manitou Island [link] and pictures the theme of "Standing Still." Basically, Charmian and her friend, Mani, the manitou (that would be the big mooselike guy at her side), have run into the evil manitou Megissogwun for the first time and discovered just how powerful he is...neither of them can move!

Now, why did this almost kill the 100 Picture Challenge? This is actually the third version of this drawing. I did the first one back in late August/early September, but didn't like it, so did it again. That was the one I inked and planned to upload...but I still didn't like it. I couldn't figure out how to draw Mani right, so I just set it aside and moved on to other things. See, when a piece of art turns out well, it makes me feel like drawing more, but when one doesn't turn out, it's terribly discouraging and I don't really feel like working on it anymore. So in the meantime I've been working on my writing and looking at elk and deer faces whenever I've come across pictures of them, to see what I might have been doing wrong. Finally I traced the second version and redid Mani's entire face while keeping the rest of the picture intact, though I did mess it up a bit here and there (grrr I hate tracing). I'm STILL not entirely satisfied, but it's the best I can do with the skills I have now.
This is just the inked sketch. I cropped off a bit of the background for now. I'm planning on filling it all in with colored pencil, as that's the only medium I have, that and a photo program which mangles my pictures when I resize and try to up the saturation a bit.
Anyway...the next theme I believe is "Dying" and I already have it inked in.
This will be scrapped later on when I upload the finished version. Just wanted to put this in my gallery to brag a bit.
Criticism not desired as I already know all the flaws this has, thank you very much.

Charmian stared into the glittering blue eyes, her own eyes watering in the whirl of the wind that spun around them; the eyes which fixed on hers were vaguely malevolent and yet oddly blank at the same time. She found that she couldn't stop staring into them, and it felt as if her voice had been sucked down into her throat.

She felt Mani's fur bristling and heard him let out a shrill whistle. She felt his muscles tense and prepared herself to let go of him for when he should charge at the big man standing before them...but his eyes flicked toward the manitou and flared brighter, and then Mani whistled again.

Red Land One--! He didn't bother enunciating anything else, but a barrage of mental images flew through her mind, and she could tell that he was frozen to the spot. She glanced at him in surprise and his eyes shifted toward hers, panicked, but other than that he did nothing, didn't even flick an ear. Charmian looked back at the man in the trail and she gasped to see that he was walking straight toward her.

She took a step back, then another, but her legs were shaking so badly that she could barely move, herself. She tried tensing her legs to flee but hardly anything happened, other than a flex of her toes.

What's--what's wrong with me--? Why can't I move--?!

Megissogwun is from Ojibwa mythology. Charmian and Mani are © Tehuti.
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